a tale of tails, tenacity, and tedium, as told by me, usually barefoot and bellowing

Sunday, January 29, 2012

Saturday Centus…A Day Late

The dark stranger entered the dance hall.
The silent, patient type, he waited.
Our eyes met, we looked away,
both interested, but too shy to act

His toes tapped to the R&B.
I swayed, where I stood,
in time to the waltz.
We could both feel the attraction.

The night moved on, as they always do.
We held moist glasses with cold drinks,
sneaking glimpses at one another
as we both avoided the dance floor.

Slowly he moved toward me and spoke,
”May I have this dance?”
Displaying his badge,
the mysterious stranger in my arms whispered,
“We both know where all the bodies are buried.”

I keep forgetting about these fun writing prompts at Saturday Centus.  Join the fun and the challenge.

26 comments:

Debi said...

That was beautiful. I am not so gifted that way.

Judie said...

What a surprise conclusion! Or is it? I'd like to read more of this mystery!!

Michaele said...

You have quite a talent there!

Farm Girl said...

You are sure good with rhyme.

Journaling Woman said...

Very good. Love iiiiiiiiit.

Sue said...

Wel done, Gail!

You need to play along more often!!

=)

Dreaming said...

I am in awe of your writing! You have crafted a great vision, with a surprise ending that makes the reader think up all kinds of 'next steps'!

DesertHen said...

I liked the twist at the end! Well done!

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

That's an exciting and unexpected dance move. I really like it.
Great to meet you, and thanks for dropping by so I could readily do the same.

anitamombanita said...

Love the twist at the end! Nicely done...

And crazy that you and Sue used the same image in your pieces, but with different effect. Love that sculpture!

Lynne said...

Love the sculpture but woman . . . you caught me with your poetic story weave . . . ending with mystic . . .

LindaG said...

Interesting post, Gail. :)

An English Shepherd said...

nice post :-)

The Golden Eagle said...

What a conclusion! That twist was definitely a surprise.

Bookie said...

Might be a day late but worth the wait. Excellent little scene for this Centus!

Bookie said...

Might be a day late but worth the wait. Excellent little scene for this Centus!

Nonna Beach said...

A very original, well written and creative take on the prompt...LOVED that twist ending !!!

Jo said...

I agree with Sue, you really do need to play with us more often!

Pat said...

Excellent! I love the ending! So surprising!

Tgoette said...

That was an awesome post with a surprising twist at the end! Very well done!

Nezzy said...

Now girl, I wanna know too!!!

More please....????

Great prompt.

Have a beautiful day sweetie!!! :o)

Kara said...

ooh that was good. I didn't see it coming at all.

labbie1 said...

VERY interesting! I didn't envision that ending!

Lisa said...

Love the surprising ending!

moondustwriter said...

I found the prompt the eleventh hour
Had to see what others came up with
Loved the romance inuendo and the turn at the end

Jenny said...

What a twist at the end, Miss Gail.

This was some really superb word crafting.

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