a tale of tails, tenacity, and tedium, as told by me, usually barefoot and bellowing

Sunday, May 27, 2012

Mag 119 Prompted By Tess Kincade...

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House At Dusk by Edward Hopper

The House That Jack Built

After building the house he sought the perfect mate to  match.  Next the two perfect children arrived exactly two years apart.

Oh, the secrets those curtains and dark windows covered.  To the community Jack was a fine upstanding businessman, but to his family, only paraded on special occasions as if they were prize acquisitions, he was a different man.

Jack had many secrets.

The perfect family huddled in the deep dark corners of the house that could never be called a home.

Tonight Jack was content viewing his other trophies people never saw. 

19 comments:

Lynne said...

Interesting tale . . . I wonder how often that is the truth?

Catfish Tales said...

Eeee.... I lived in such a house, and my dad was named Jack. Are you psychic?!!

Daydreamertoo said...

How creepy. It's true that no-one knows what goes on behind closed doors. Our house was the same.
I so 'get' this.

Cad said...

Menace behind the scenes...

Little Nell said...

A house dripping with dark secrets and controlling husband/father figure. The name Jack seems far too friendly, unless of course he was known as 'The Ripper', then what would those trophies be? An interesting take on this prompt.

zongrik said...

I call it "the list."

There's a list of things you have to have in life, and some of them are people, and they don't really matter, just that they get check marked on the list!!

neither good nor bad

Helen said...

OK, now I'm curious!!

Brian Miller said...

shivers...this def has a creepiness to it....jack sounds like he could be rather sinister....

Dana Dampier said...

This happens way more than some would like to admit... unfortunatly. You were straight to the point and you did it very well!

Country Gal said...

Keep going I want more ! Awesome ! You could write a book girl . Have a good evening !

Linda said...

Your secretive world is a sad reality for too many people. Living a pretentious life fools no one and hurts many. Thank you for this walk through the shadows, Gail. Very insightful. =D

Irene said...

People can be trophies that are never properly loved. I wonder in what other ways Jack profited of his trophies? It sure is a darkly psychological story. Disturbing even. Good job!

gautami tripathy said...

This dark piece conjures up images. Gotta know more...


discontent

Pat said...

So true. Many people hide behind images, and lead different lives behind closed doors. This is a good one!

Tumblewords: said...

A bit of a chill falls with your perfect words.

Sue said...

Disturbing! Well done. You really set a mood here.

=)

SaucyKod said...

You know that old saying "Behind Clsoed Doors" - nice one Gail - could be quite chilling Stephen Jr.

Tess Kincaid said...

Sadly there are many Jacks out there...thought-provoking take...

Carrie Burtt said...

Yes, houses can hide many secrets....great writing Gail! :-)

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