These are words Ms Jenny used for this week's challenge at Saturday Centus, a writing prompt. Join the fun and visit all the entries.
Blocking the sun filling the air
The smoke rose everywhere.
People gathered to look
On the day the earth shook
What can this be?
Smoke was rolling
No one could see
One lad tiny and fair
Softly said,
I can get there.
He walked long and far
Using the muted sun
As his guiding star.
His dog and the lad
Armed with a stick
Walked from clear air
To where it was thick
Disappearing in smoke
The lad was last seen
Waving out the window
Of a big silver thing.
No trace found
Except for one dog hair
On the ground.
19 comments:
There you go woman, whipping up those words, poetic style and telling a story. Was this your fair haired lad by chance?
Nice Job! Great images created in only a few words! That's what I love about this challenge.
I love the mystery in this.
=)
Gail,
Nothing like leaving people thinking :-)
So clever! I laughed at one dog hair left on the ground...(I'm constantly cussing the mounds of hair everywhere in my house) Oh well, I love my furry pets, hair and all!
Oh my I can sense another tale of this fine lad and dog....hanging by a thread of hair....to be continued hopefully!
Powerful words that have me seeing their images in my mind...
The is just SOOOO clever! Sort of reminds me of Clost Encounters...
I thought of UFO abduction too. Nice one.
That was a unique spin on the prompt for sure. :)
I think the worst happened but I hope not. Is there a good outcome or is it left to my imagination?
That's a neat picture. :o)
Wow! Great imagery in verse. :)
Oh the imagination left to wonder what happened to them. Yes, I thought aliens too. lol
~Naila Moon
http://writing-out-of-the-blue.blogspot.com/2012/05/remembrance-of-chaosmy-story-written.html
Just checking to see what the gang was up to. Very nicely written, Gail.
I wasn't thinking UFO at all, rather a catastrophy of sorts like probably your boy was.
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fabulous response to the prompt ... i was also thinking ufo ...
You just amaze me! I look at that photo and think..."ummmmmm" and you whip out a clever tale and tell it well! =)
A UFO. I was thinking wildfire. ~Ames
Wow. I loved this. It felt a ballad to me...one that should be sung atop a mountain...
It was beautiful.
Really neat use of this picture prompt!
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