It would be hard to find plains free of first blood in this world we've have been aggressive for millennia all over this one. If you find such a place keep quiet about it.
Very impressed with how you dispatched those dozen words with so few pen strokes. It's my first time over here at the Wordle, & it took me a Haibun, 4 paragraphs & a haiku to arrive at the same place.
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change the first line to stalking the river naked and there you have me.. he he he
I felt this one, my friend. Of course, as you know, I often do with your writing.
I love how you captured the mood in such a tightly written poem. Stellar.
You are the master of writing concise, yet powerful, poetry!
It would be hard to find plains free of first blood in this world we've have been aggressive for millennia all over this one. If you find such a place keep quiet about it.
Or stalking naked
brought clarity
beyond red. . .
Not good at these but YOU ARE!
There is a sense of ambiguity in this that makes it all the more profound and necessary
Nicely concise.
Few words loaded with deep feeling!
Very impressed with how you dispatched those dozen words with so few pen strokes. It's my first time over here at the Wordle, & it took me a Haibun, 4 paragraphs & a haiku to arrive at the same place.
The essentialness of this abbreviated form brings home the depth of sentiment ... brilliant.
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