The Thing About Rust
Things Carried
Empty horseshoe
With rusty nails
Plucked from
The worn trail
Inverted
For good luck
The empty shoe
Stood tucked
Standing in honor
Lying in state
Next to a knife
And a Civil War plate
My horses
Ran barefoot
The shoe
Remains empty
Empty of luck
Empty of horse
Just like my heart
Empty of course
37 comments:
This is a very cool response to the prompt.......love that the horses go barefoot. I'll bet they enjoy that! Up here our horses' feet are shod, for walking on concrete - not as wonderful as galloping through open fields......loved the ending!
i like it. quite whimsical.
I thought it was sad...
Moving, thoughtful ... actually it still has me deep in thought .
ha. your heart is not empty...smiles...but you do have cool treasures..
Your heart will never be totally empty. Great poem.
A touch of whimsy, a touch of melancholy...nice work.
btw I doubt your heart will ever by empty. :)
Now, I always thought a horseshoe that way up was inviting the devil to sit in it, and upside down one meant the luck runs out - which brings us to sideways... LOL
I don't believe you have no luck or an empty heart, you are too lovely!
Lynne x
The great thing about an empty heart is that it is there to be filled. Great words and beautifully written.
Your heart is not empty...it is overflowing, Gail!...:)JP
I agree with "A Quiet Corner" - your heart is overflowing with life, love, fun and mystery. Superb job.
Love to all :)
I like the old items but whole piece resonated of emptiness and sadness ~
Wow Gail I always love your poetry it makes me feel.....Hug B
I feel grief in your words. Some longing.
Well done, but empty isn't good. You need to fill up will all things good.
Have a terrific day. ☺
I liked the picture, and where the poem went using the items in the photo. Really liked the last stanza..which really brought this poem effectively to a close!
Awwww, so touching with your closing stanza.
I feel sadness when your poems touch on missing your horses ...
Oh, well done!
♥
Bittersweet...you have it worded in such a way that it evokes sweet and sad emotions. Well done, my friend.
I know you miss your horses so much and this is really sad.
Two hard prompts- and you did a great job with them!
Amazing... & I love that last stanza!!
I miss my horses too, even though it's been a good while since we said goodbye... I came across reminders when I moved, my riding hat, a bridle... and now here in this lovely, heartfelt poem
I enjoyed this as a response to both prompts. Both lightness and a bit of sadness. I wonder if horses prefer to be unshod. Never thought about that. LOL
I enjoyed the melancholy at the end... not all poems are autobiographical ! The last two stanzas do an excellent job telling the rest of the story, but I really liked the third stanza describing the historical items. So cool you have these! (I'm assuming they are yours)
The ending brought tears to my tired eyes! Well done Gail!
A sad but thoughtful poem...life gives us such moments.
I felt the lament!
This poem is so you.
No wonder I liked it.
=)
This is so clever and well done, with a bit of sadness and wit!
I love it
:D
Gail, love barefoot horses :-) So sorry they're gone, had to say good bye to mine a million years ago. They never leave us, really and they're definitely romping around in that heart of yours :-)
Oh I didn't see the prompt--but for me--this piece just gets better and better the more I read it--loved this
Making light is often a way we try to cope. I can relate to that.
Oh, touching lines...being an animal-lover, emotions are easy to relate. But,its a magical poem. Never thought, one could write such a beautiful piece on a horse-shoe...
The last paragraph is awesome!
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