Out of Standard prompt...
Pigeon Superstition
I crave not a meal but you
i kiss a bird's feather
and brush the dog
again and again and again
until you're here with me.
the same things i do
to convince you to stay
are done over and over
and you stay
the night we watched
Haley's Comet
i thought you would go
but you stayed
i knew that night
it was your love
that brought you and my love
caused you to stay
the rest was
only pigeon superstition
i couldn't risk you leaving
to wait for Haley's Comet
i crave not a meal but you
11 comments:
Nice, Gail. Love for sure. I'd rather eat first and takemy chances on her staying.
BTW, Mrs. Jim and I watched both Haley's Comet and Comet Kahoutek together after parking on a dark street.
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Oh, this is good, Gail. "I crave not a meal but you....."
Excellent opening line Gail! I like how you book ended this poem with that sentiment. This piece is fraught with emotion and I appreciated your words. Thanks for posting and viva la!
I guess trust was born...love how you opened and closed this piece with the same words.
I hope that we do not have to have another comet's tail to seal the deal.. it's good it can be just that once...
If i ever use that closing sentence of I crave not a meal, only you, you will need to build my coffin. NOTHING comes between me and food. as you can tell by looking. As for the rest of the poem i like it a lot and it does say love
Wow, this is good. It's pure love straight from the heart.
Gail, that was just awesome, and thanks so much for posting it. Interesting structure on this one.
i love the sweet emotion expressed here..
Timelessness from one Haley's Comet (1986?) to the next--sweet expression of such love.
Very . . . VERY . . . Excellent . . .
Love, LOVE . . .
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