a tale of tails, tenacity, and tedium, as told by me, usually barefoot and bellowing

Sunday, August 16, 2015

Time

Weekend Mini-challenge 
With picture prompt from Mindlovemisery's Menagerie 

After midnight we turn
into what we were
party's over
masks are dropped

Locking ourselves
in rooms of regret
we question the realities
of time after time

Like Alice the sign says eat
we do
the hands drop from time
as Poe's Raven screams Nevermore

37 comments:

Sandra said...

I LOVE THE LAST LINE... Nevermore Nevermore.. i can also relate to rooms of regret

Kerry O'Connor said...

The two opening lines set this up for a thought-provoking read.

Outlawyer said...

"We question the realities of time after time" is such a very apt phrase for what we do not question enough! An interesting and thought-provoking piece--I am trying to do a lot more questioning as I age. Thanks. k .

Plowing Through Life (Martha) said...

Very cool read!

Sanaa Rizvi said...

Such an intense & thought provoking read :)

eileeninmd said...

Wonderful read, well done!

Grace said...

I specially like that second stanza with the rooms of regret ~ Thought provoking post Gail ~

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

This is a thoughty read--so well done!

McGuffy Ann Morris said...

I really like this one. You painted a clear picture for me, one that I think is very relatable. Excellent, Gail.
Someday I will rejoin poetry circles. Unfortunately, too much keeps me from writing and meme sharing right now.

C.C. said...

Gail, every single line in this poem is stellar. Every. Single. Line. Stunning. The whole thing. Absolute brilliance :-)

brudberg said...

Just like Alice we are gullible to the lure of what time can do.. great read

Nataša Dolenc said...

interesting images brought together..

Other Mary said...

What a wonderful combination of the stories we all know so well into something all your own, yet universal. Two thumbs up!

debispoems said...

I love the last two lines - what an image

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Love the phrase "rooms of regret". Loved this poem, Gail.

Lowcarb team member said...

'Party's over masks are dropped'

'We question the reality'

'the hands drop from time'

My three favourite pieces - don't know why? Should I analyse why?
No ... I just enjoyed it.

Well Done

All the best Jan

Mary said...

Interesting that the masks are dropped after midnight. If only there was no need to wear masks at all!

Susan Kane said...

A riveting read. In fact, I read it two, then three times. many thoughts and connections in there.

Truedessa said...

Rooms of regret..if walls could talk I wonder what stories they would tell..the second stanza really touches a chord.

LindaG said...

Great job, Gail! :-)

thotpurge said...

Ah! my poem was about masks as well and a hunt for reality!! So interesting!

Lynne said...

Each time I read it I hear a bit more . . .
Very good Gail . . .
Deep . . .

Sumana Roy said...

exactly that's what we do...how true!!!...brilliant & thought provoking...

Susie Clevenger said...

Oh, those first two lines...how we love our masks more than our truth. Great poem!!

Lux G. said...

You are a poet. Lovely.

SuyashJ said...

One of the best things things I've read in a while

Amber said...

That is a powerful closing, so often we go out into the world desperate to belong return home feeling ashamed and dirty and not at all loved or worthy (no matter how much positive reinforcement was received). So many of us feel like impostors and live with this constant fear of being found out because we never let anyone see or love the real person inside.

mindlovemisery

Old Egg said...

I have said 'Nevermore' a number of times, but it doesn't work for me!

Moonie said...

great sense of Poe in your lines and the images fitting.

Susan Anderson said...

"locking ourselves into rooms of regret" and Poe's raven screaming nevermore were my favorite parts of this poem, but I liked the whole.

=)

Debbie said...

this is EXCELLENT......really!!! so relative!!!!

aspiritofsimplicity said...

locking ourselves in rooms of regret....makes one wonder how many of us do that, when in reality, we hold the keys to set ourselves free.

Wsprsweetly Of Cottages said...

I am always delighted ..and thoughtful..when you come up with lines for a challenge! Always!!

Karen S. said...

Oh I like this fun read, and the photos rock!

Wendy Bourke said...

A poignant, evocative and layered piece beautifully rendered with just a touch of mystery. One of faves of yours!

R.K. Garon said...

A wonderful piece... truly enjoyed.
ZQ

G L Meisner said...

Well constructed, its hard to go wrong with an Alice reference.

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