Weekend Mini-challenge
With picture prompt from Mindlovemisery's Menagerie
sharing with Poets United Poetry Pantry
After midnight we turn
into what we were
party's over
masks are dropped
Locking ourselves
in rooms of regret
we question the realities
of time after time
Like Alice the sign says eat
we do
the hands drop from time
as Poe's Raven screams Nevermore
37 comments:
I LOVE THE LAST LINE... Nevermore Nevermore.. i can also relate to rooms of regret
The two opening lines set this up for a thought-provoking read.
"We question the realities of time after time" is such a very apt phrase for what we do not question enough! An interesting and thought-provoking piece--I am trying to do a lot more questioning as I age. Thanks. k .
Very cool read!
Such an intense & thought provoking read :)
Wonderful read, well done!
I specially like that second stanza with the rooms of regret ~ Thought provoking post Gail ~
This is a thoughty read--so well done!
I really like this one. You painted a clear picture for me, one that I think is very relatable. Excellent, Gail.
Someday I will rejoin poetry circles. Unfortunately, too much keeps me from writing and meme sharing right now.
Gail, every single line in this poem is stellar. Every. Single. Line. Stunning. The whole thing. Absolute brilliance :-)
Just like Alice we are gullible to the lure of what time can do.. great read
interesting images brought together..
What a wonderful combination of the stories we all know so well into something all your own, yet universal. Two thumbs up!
I love the last two lines - what an image
Love the phrase "rooms of regret". Loved this poem, Gail.
'Party's over masks are dropped'
'We question the reality'
'the hands drop from time'
My three favourite pieces - don't know why? Should I analyse why?
No ... I just enjoyed it.
Well Done
All the best Jan
Interesting that the masks are dropped after midnight. If only there was no need to wear masks at all!
A riveting read. In fact, I read it two, then three times. many thoughts and connections in there.
Rooms of regret..if walls could talk I wonder what stories they would tell..the second stanza really touches a chord.
Great job, Gail! :-)
Ah! my poem was about masks as well and a hunt for reality!! So interesting!
Each time I read it I hear a bit more . . .
Very good Gail . . .
Deep . . .
exactly that's what we do...how true!!!...brilliant & thought provoking...
Oh, those first two lines...how we love our masks more than our truth. Great poem!!
You are a poet. Lovely.
One of the best things things I've read in a while
That is a powerful closing, so often we go out into the world desperate to belong return home feeling ashamed and dirty and not at all loved or worthy (no matter how much positive reinforcement was received). So many of us feel like impostors and live with this constant fear of being found out because we never let anyone see or love the real person inside.
mindlovemisery
I have said 'Nevermore' a number of times, but it doesn't work for me!
great sense of Poe in your lines and the images fitting.
"locking ourselves into rooms of regret" and Poe's raven screaming nevermore were my favorite parts of this poem, but I liked the whole.
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this is EXCELLENT......really!!! so relative!!!!
locking ourselves in rooms of regret....makes one wonder how many of us do that, when in reality, we hold the keys to set ourselves free.
I am always delighted ..and thoughtful..when you come up with lines for a challenge! Always!!
Oh I like this fun read, and the photos rock!
A poignant, evocative and layered piece beautifully rendered with just a touch of mystery. One of faves of yours!
A wonderful piece... truly enjoyed.
ZQ
Well constructed, its hard to go wrong with an Alice reference.
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