Winds strong enough to ruffle
Tail feathers on a metal rooster
I walked into the wind
Willing inspiration
I wondered why I picked today
A colder day than any this week
The ground wet with last night's rain
The sand marked with flows past
Leaves danced in straight lines
A chorus line of early winter
Scattered like my thoughts
Over the winter landscape
Inspiration had been my goal
The day chased me indoors
With no thoughts
Except the price of heating fuel.
17 comments:
ha! your ending is perfect! I enjoyed this walk through your thoughts and landscape, thanks for taking us along.
I know exactly what you are saying here. I loved the way you expressed the details of your walk. "Leaves danced in straight lines" - indeed I can picture that. And, oh, the heating bill IS a worry.
Enjoyed your contribution to Poetry Jam; and I hope that we will see you again!
Need I say more, I love that metal Rooster though.....Keep Cozy,Francine.
I LOVE the ending and that is exactly what i would have thought IF i had gone out for a walk on a day like that and as much as i dislike rain and cold, would have had to take my walk indoors
I really enjoyed your poem - you translated the mood and elements wonderfully. Turns out that blustery weather was great inspiration after all!
Very well done, Gail. You are a poet, in case you don't know it.
;)
Love the metal rooster. You know, it would just look GREAT with my collection of roosters! Hee hee.
Personally, I don't see ANYTHING shaking your tail feathers - wind or otherwise! ;)
Loved your metal rooster photo! And I also enjoyed going along on your walk. Hope the nice weather returns! I always enjoy meeting new people through their poems. I help with prompts here about once a month and it has been fun to become familiar with the works people post. Welcome and please come again!
Boy, Amen to that!
awesome! 'a chorus line of early winter' - brilliant. :)
I would have to give you a 5 on this. 5 is tops... I used to tell my students a 5 was better than I could do, and your work tops anything I could manage!
I like how you are able to bring the reader along on the walk with you. I was there, seeing everything because of your interesting word choice! Love it!
That "chorus line of early winter" stood out right away! (Danced out, actually!) This is so nicely done.
Very reflective Gail . . .
ha. thank you ma'am...cool to see you playing along...its beastly out here this evening...just above freezing and raining so i am glad i got my walk in yesterday....ruffle the tail feathers of a metal rooster...now that is some wind...the cost of heating oil...ack...that i imagine is on the mind of quite a few
Enjoyed the winter... I loved the ending lines... Nice poem!
Was glad to know you headed back in! The winds shaking the metal tail feathers sounded too cold to even head out!
especially love the opening lines!
you definitely succeeded in portraying the cold!
thanks for participating at Poetry Jam!
♥
dani
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