Sunday and time for The Mag!
FIRST THOUGHT
From cig to butt
Is short by most standards
Then it’s discarded
In the streets
In the fields
In the gutters
To travel endlessly
Stripped of tobacco
Stripped of identity
It becomes a filter
A filter of nothing
Whose main purpose
For years ahead
Is to simply exist
With all clutter
SECOND THOUGHT
He waited
He watched
He smoked.
He checked the time
Checked it again
Time ran out.
The length of
Four cigarettes
Decided her fate.
The unfaithful
Took her last breath
As he smoked.
11 comments:
i like the first one best but the last one shows your talent
I like the first one best, too.
And it is so true unless you have learned how to field strip it...
The length of
Four cigarettes
Decided her fate.
So LOVE that!
I like the notion of only the filter being left...observant and metaphoric...
Oh my goodness, that ending was awesome!
Again . . . your talent amazes me . . .
yow! Both are fantastic- but the second one has my vote!
nicely done...love the ending also...thanks for sharing
The first observation--so true. The residuals linger forever.
Really liked the darker spin on the second.
Two really good Magpies!!
Two very different perspectives on the image .... great writing, Gail!
Happy New Year
Back to form on that second one, heehee.
Enjoyed both.
(But I liked the one about your hubby even more.)
=)
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