a tale of tails, tenacity, and tedium, as told by me, usually barefoot and bellowing

Sunday, October 6, 2013

Time Lost

Magpie Tales challenges us to match words to picture.
Poetry Jam:  Backward is their creative challenge.
This is a twofer (two for one)
image by crilleb50
TIME LOST

Alone 
He sat
Wishing
To turn back time
All the clocks
Did nothing
His heart in rhythm
Tick beat tick beat tick beat

Tick beat tick beat tick beat
His heart in rhythm
Did nothing
All the clocks
To turn back time
Wishing 
He sat
Alone

31 comments:

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

That works well in reverse!
And that image is part of the cover for one of Ellie Garratt's books.

Sandee said...

This is done very nicely. Brilliant in fact.

Have a fabulous day. :)

Ginny Brannan said...

Hmmm, interesting format. It gives the illusion of building up and diminishing, and goes well with the prompt.

Sandra said...

thank you Alex, I did not see that it could be read forward or backward. yet another great poem by YOU..
all those clocks behind the man, made me think
the clock of Time has brought me to this place in time, Waiting on a bench that is like the graveyard the elephants go to and wait to die. or maybe that bench is a nursing home or in a nursing home yard.

Empty Nester said...

A poetic palindrome! LOVE it!

TexWisGirl said...

how cool!

Ginny Brannan said...

Thanks for the comment on my dVerse post. Here is a link to the one I shared for The Mag! http://insideoutpoetry.blogspot.com/2011/07/ticking-clock.html

Irene said...

Nicely done, Gail. You see how the simplest poem can be the best, and even be something I didn't know the name of. Did you? xox

Kathe W. said...

I like your format- turning back the time

Country Gal said...

Great writing and photo goes wonderfully with it ! Thanks for sharing . Have a good day !

Lynne said...

Works very well reversed.

Saucy Kodz said...

Forward n backward - how very well done - quite brilliant in fact. I really liked this Gail :)

aspiritofsimplicity said...

nice work

Terri Buster said...

Nice one- I don't think I could do one of those..my brain doesn't work in reverse very well! LOL

Sandy said...

Beautiful post, I like reverse :-)

Mystic_Mom said...

Very nicely done!

24 Paws of Love said...

Very cool. I like how smart and simple it is, yet full of feeling. The forward and backward is awesome in itself, but you pulled it off marvelously.

Kay L. Davies said...

Ah, well done, Gail. Very well done.
K

Vandana Sharma said...

Time stops for none and waiting is all one can do.

alan1704 said...

His heart in rhythm - great line and this worked in both direction. So much captured and made to feel so forlorn.

Helen said...

This is great, Gail ... not easy to do the backward thing!

Dip-Dip and the Bridge said...

Hmmmm, that sounds a lot like me! LOL
Lynne x

Sue said...

How cool is that? I like the reverse.

=)

Tess Kincaid said...

Lovely mirrored poem...

Brian Miller said...

ha. you did nice...
alone wishing he could go back...or wishing he was alone...we are a bunch of walking contradictions now arent we....

Kutamun said...

Elegant Pathos ... Thanks

mindlovemisery said...

Awesome palindrome!

Mary said...

Oh, this worked beautifully backward and forward. I really enjoyed the subtle change in meaning between the first (and last) three lines in the forward & backward form. You really ROCKED this prompt well.

I always enjoy your participation in PJ!!

Jerry E Beuterbaugh said...

Cleverly done!

Ginny said...

Hi there, I come from Sandra, we are blogging sisters. When she showed this picture it blew me away. And reading your whole poem, I adore it!! I think a poem is successful if it makes us have strong emotions, and yours really does that for me. I love poetry and used to write some. I have read your profile, and we are alike in many ways. I was born in 1949 and have been married 43 years. Looking through your blog, I love the format and the clever things you have to say about the pictures! Especially the one about drawing a fork.

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Expertly done!
Anna :o]

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