Time for Jenny Matlock's Saturday Centus.The prompt this week is: 'Has it really been a decade?'
Number of words: 100 plus the 6 words of the prompt. 106 total. Style of writing: Any Pictures: Any you want to share.
“Has it really been a decade?” he asked while brushing and braiding my long hair. I wondered why. I was thirteen. I knew what a decade was.
I didn’t remember Mama but Paul talked a lot about her. He asked me to call him Paul since Daddy made him feel so old. He would always laugh when he said that.
We moved around a lot but that was okay. “It’s just you and me, kid," Paul always said.
Learning a new phrase that morning, Age Progression, I stared at myself on the milk carton.
Then Paul asked, “Kitten, are you ready to play our little game?”
19 comments:
Didn't like the thoughts AT ALL but amazed at your Age Progression creativity . . . I need a continuation to 106 words . . .
very interesting start to a story. mine needs to be the first sentence
had it been two decades? nothing much changed in the last decade.
Super...great 'chill-bump inducing' twist!
Did Elizabeth Smart's kidnapping, a decade ago, influence your writing?
Scary because it is so real!
Great 106. Made chill bumps appear.
T
nice job.
EW! That definitely provoked a strong emotion. Well written.
Really disturbing.
Well done, Gail!
=)
*shudders* I am afraid that is a true reality for many children. We can only hope they will be found.
Good write!
~Naila Moon
http://writing-out-of-the-blue.blogspot.com/2012/06/my-fiancea-story.html
You had me right up to the sinister end. I think this is a really good use of 100 words, and I love the concrete images.
Namaste..............cj
That was very disturbing. Where does your mind go?
Ugh, it started out so nice and then wham what a detour. I guess that's what makes it a creative way to take it, it was very unexpected.
Oohh...a little bit creepy there.
Wow' can I just say that that was super creepy.?...very well written.
Thanks Gail, for another CREEPY 100 words.You captured it all introducing the image of herself on the milk carton. CREEPY!
EEEEEUUUUUWWWWW! Gross! Creepy too..What made ya think of that one, girlfriend?!
Amazing what you can do with so little words! True, I wanted to vomit my dinner all over the computer, but still, this was great!
Gail, you did an excellent job with the prompt. Chilling, but unfortunately, way too true these days.
Gail!
Gail!
Wow.
What incredible writing here.
I didn't see the twist coming...and then...
BAM!
This was really incredibly vivid writing.
Again...
At the risk of being repetitive...
WOW!
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