Innocent yet sultry
Determined unwilling
Inviting yet aloof
She stood
Just through the glass
Beyond reach
Mere inches away
He stood
He tried the door
She spoke not a word
The latch held
They stood
Anger sparked
Innocence in jeopardy
The door shook
He stood
Shoulder to wood
Forceful entry
Door splintered
They stood
Holding her ground
The law on her side
The gun smoked
She stood...alone
19 comments:
Wow! Not what I was expecting. That's what make it so good.
you go, girl :)
Holding ground... yes.
Oooooooh, I like this!!
oh dang...just make sure you shoot him in the front, cause if you shoot him in the back the law is not on your side...
I was thinking it would have ended differently.
Hi Gail, surprised ending for me to.....Blessings Francine.
yow! serves him right- surprised me!
Wow--took me to an unexpected place--Loved that!
So few words yet a full punch of a story. Very good!
Wow, you had me at the shoulder to door! Wonderful write- and so not what I had thought would be! So delightful!
Nice twist - aah, Gail King is back. You gotta get out more often to be inspired to knock out a good punch like this one, Eh.
oh no, not a happy ending. that is what she gets for standing in the window looking like that...
didn't see that coming...
Love "shoulder to wood"...and the surprise ending...
I must admit - I was not expecting that!
You caught us off-balance; powerful denouement.
So very Lonesome Dove ! Great Gail , thanks
Holy cow! I didn't expect her to shoot the jerk! Love it!
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