a tale of tails, tenacity, and tedium, as told by me, usually barefoot and bellowing

Sunday, July 15, 2012

The Mag #126 The Lady In Black

Magpie Tales by Tess Kincaid is the place to flex you creative muscles.  Each week she gives us a picture prompt and encourages our imagination to go wild.


At first we think she's waiting
As she smokes her cigarette
But she is watching
For what hasn't happened yet.

One A dances to classical music
One B has lots of cats
One C is always eating
and has become quite fat.

The second floor gets better
A loving couple there
Who quite frequently
Show how much they care.

Two B apartment houses a lonely man
Who sits quietly in his chair
He smokes his pipe in one hand
In the other his gun is always there.

Upward to the third floor
the view is rather clear
This monster beats his wife at night
and no one seems to hear.

Oh, yes, the lady in black is waiting.
A gun within her purse.
A thousand times within her mind
The moment she has rehearsed.

The lady on the third floor
who daily denies the sin
The one who takes the beatings
Is the lady in black's best friend.

19 comments:

Tess Kincaid said...

I really like the Hitchcockesque "Rear Window" feel here...nice write...

Heaven said...

A dark and chilling story...nice creative take ~

Irene said...

Women do suffer a bad fate in your stories. Is there something you are trying to tell us? Even symbolically?

Kay said...

liked your original take on this picture..x

Linda said...

Speculation on lives behind closed doors. There are interesting twists and turns in this tale, Gail. I love the suspense you have so cleverly created. Thank you for sharing. =D

RiverBend Farm said...

Very interesting...

Laurel's Quill said...

Annie, get your gun and waste the Bas----!!

Helen said...

WOW!!! Great write!

SaucyKod said...

Gail, you musta been saving your creative brain for this one, for you outdid yourself. Really nice read, creepy, suspensful and originally clever and so emerges another dark poem. Kool, just Kool :)

Day Dreamer said...

awesome tale! funny too! i had to reread the first stanza before i realized you meant apartments, but i'm glad i did!

Brian Miller said...

dang...you built this really well...walking us room to room....and it being her friend taking ht ebeating...and her just watching....ugh....well done...

Galen Pearl said...

Thanks for following my blog. Following back and looking forward to reading more.

Green Speck said...

So many shades of life, in just a few words .... lovely concept :-)

Little Nell said...

Rear Window indeed. Revenge is sweet, but will she, won’t she? Hitchcockian suspense personified.

Sue said...

What a great idea, Gail. And so well executed (pun kind of intended).

Loved it.

=)

Pat said...

I, too, like the "Rear Window" effect. And I like how you tie it all together.

Jinksy said...

The last two verses are full of potential menace... well done.

Karen S. said...

Darn! Tess took the words right out of my thoughts...this was wild...great writing!

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

this is different and very nice... love it!

JJrod'z

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